Sooo, here we go ^^ I saw that you filled the prompt (<3 <3 <3) but I didn’t want to read it in-between anything and wanted to have time, so that’s why this comment comes so (too) late :D
First of all I want to thank you of course for writing it! And after the first read I got to say: I-love-it! It’s so amazing what you did with the prompt, with the pair, with Pansy’s character in general! I adore the self-confident image of this woman who is at the same time kinda torn but even confident in her torn-ness :D
And your writing style. Oh my goodness, it’s amazing! I read you haven’t written anything in a longer time? I would’ve never known! And this is not just to flatter you, it’s my honest opinion :-* I love what you did with the brackets (is that the right term? ._. I’m from Germany, sry, I mean these special sentences that give a deeper meaning and bring out the ambivalence in Pansy), it’s so meaningful and spices things up :D
Let’s take a closer look on the text :3
“a cigarette between her lips and everything carefully wrapped into the smoke” Love that <3
“Daphne is too blonde in direct sunlight and not blonde enough in candle light” Awesome little detail and also a great way of getting into Pansy’s thoughts (kinda :’D Hope you know what I mean)
“would like to scratch the porcelain surface of her skin” porcelain <3 Reminds me a bit of Sansa :D Also this description of Daphne being always “good” and stuff :D
“Pansy always makes sure to leave a lips shaped red lipstick stain on her cheek whenever she kisses her goodbye or hello.” xDD That is SO Pansy :D
“Appearances are the most important thing, after all.” As well as this ^^
“(And her nails, her nails will be painted red, red like her lips and her blood and this imaginary war.)” Ooooh, I love the picture of Pansy in the black dress and the red nails and lips! Such a femme fatale :D
“Women always drink wine or champagne, so she has to do something to set herself apart from the rest of them” It’s awesome how being different is the central theme in this fic and how variously you show that!
“(Pansy thinks she could count Daphne's eyelashes if she wanted to and make a wish on each one) (and she thinks they would maybe come true).” Awwwwww, beautifully written *_*
“half a step behind and half a cigarette ahead.” Brilliant. Just brilliant.
“and Pansy is (definitely) (definitely not, no, she would never) checking out Daphne's ass” Hahaha :D Great that you also got a sense of humor in this piece!
"Careful, we'll fall", Daphne's voice echoes on the staircase. (A roll of a pair of eyes, a smile. Intent.) "Isn't that the point?"
And a perfect ending. Such a great wordplay!
So, as you can see I loved it. Did I mention that already? No? Okay: I LOVE IT!!!! I couldn’t be happier about a prompt-fill, you wrote Pansy the way I love it, your style is unique and fresh and entertaining and the setting perfect (love them on parties and the like) ^^
Thanks again for making me really happy :3 *goes into a corner and cries in awe* The world needs more Pansy-fics like this one ^^
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First of all I want to thank you of course for writing it! And after the first read I got to say: I-love-it! It’s so amazing what you did with the prompt, with the pair, with Pansy’s character in general! I adore the self-confident image of this woman who is at the same time kinda torn but even confident in her torn-ness :D
And your writing style. Oh my goodness, it’s amazing! I read you haven’t written anything in a longer time? I would’ve never known! And this is not just to flatter you, it’s my honest opinion :-*
I love what you did with the brackets (is that the right term? ._. I’m from Germany, sry, I mean these special sentences that give a deeper meaning and bring out the ambivalence in Pansy), it’s so meaningful and spices things up :D
Let’s take a closer look on the text :3
“a cigarette between her lips and everything carefully wrapped into the smoke” Love that <3
“Daphne is too blonde in direct sunlight and not blonde enough in candle light” Awesome little detail and also a great way of getting into Pansy’s thoughts (kinda :’D Hope you know what I mean)
“would like to scratch the porcelain surface of her skin” porcelain <3 Reminds me a bit of Sansa :D Also this description of Daphne being always “good” and stuff :D
“Pansy always makes sure to leave a lips shaped red lipstick stain on her cheek whenever she kisses her goodbye or hello.” xDD That is SO Pansy :D
“Appearances are the most important thing, after all.” As well as this ^^
“(And her nails, her nails will be painted red, red like her lips and her blood and this imaginary war.)” Ooooh, I love the picture of Pansy in the black dress and the red nails and lips! Such a femme fatale :D
“Women always drink wine or champagne, so she has to do something to set herself apart from the rest of them” It’s awesome how being different is the central theme in this fic and how variously you show that!
“(Pansy thinks she could count Daphne's eyelashes if she wanted to and make a wish on each one) (and she thinks they would maybe come true).” Awwwwww, beautifully written *_*
“half a step behind and half a cigarette ahead.” Brilliant. Just brilliant.
“and Pansy is (definitely) (definitely not, no, she would never) checking out Daphne's ass” Hahaha :D Great that you also got a sense of humor in this piece!
"Careful, we'll fall", Daphne's voice echoes on the staircase.
(A roll of a pair of eyes, a smile. Intent.)
"Isn't that the point?"
And a perfect ending. Such a great wordplay!
So, as you can see I loved it. Did I mention that already? No? Okay: I LOVE IT!!!!
I couldn’t be happier about a prompt-fill, you wrote Pansy the way I love it, your style is unique and fresh and entertaining and the setting perfect (love them on parties and the like) ^^
Thanks again for making me really happy :3
*goes into a corner and cries in awe*
The world needs more Pansy-fics like this one ^^